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Space exploration i to expensive and money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#space #exploration #money
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The costly aspect of
space
exploration
 has triggered some opinion that the finance for it should be invested in other fields.
This
 writer disagrees with the idea of having the development of new technologies and changes in
knowledge
 as backups. It should be known that
space
exploration
 is the root of many innovations and inventions that are crucial to daily life.
Such
 objects would be the satellite TV and the technology of GPS. As for its benefits, Google Maps is widely used among people all over the world, either for normal navigation or for
traveling
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 in strange places.
Thus
 proving why investment in
space
exploration
 is fundamental for future breakthroughs to occur and for the current ones to improve. Turning to the opposite point of view, critics argue that the
knowledge
 we
got
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 from
place
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the place
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 is mostly theoretical and
therefore
 lacks a sense of practicality in real-life practices. But they have not been aware that the
exploration
 of
space
also
sastifies
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satisfies
 humanity’s pursuit of
knowledge
. Curiosity is what helps man achieve greatness;
therefore
,
by
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stopping research into the cosmos,
it
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negatively affects the population’s future.
For instance
, just because of the wrong understanding of the solar system of the church, a scholar was executed wrongly. By that, it is critical why researching for precise
knowledge
 matters, even if it is a vague concept like
space
. Taking all of the points into account,
it is clear that
this
 essay disagrees with the given opinion because universe
exploration
 can improve technologies
as well as
 increase people's
knowledge
.
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Maintain a clear and consistent structure throughout your essay to enhance readability and coherence.
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Ensure a balanced approach by discussing both sides of the argument before stating your own opinion. This enhances the completeness of the response.
Coherence Cohesion
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Continue to support your arguments with specific examples. This strengthens your essay's persuasiveness.
Coherence Cohesion
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for your discussion by presenting the topic and stating your viewpoint clearly.
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Your essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and sentence structures, enhancing the expression of ideas.
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The use of specific examples, such as GPS technology and Google Maps, effectively supports your main points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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