In the modern world, it is no longer be necessary to use animals and animal products for food, clothing and medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion based on your knowledge and experience.

It is certainly true that the
uses
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of different types of species in human life
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reduced in recent years. As long as
people
are
adopte
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adopting
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alternatives as
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to depend on
animals
. I strongly agree with
this
statement as well as all reasonable
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will be elaborated
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the upcoming paragraphs along with my opinion.
To begin
with, unfurling some valuable reasons of
this
topic.
First
and foremost, meat is the one of the richest
food
in the world because it
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high
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amount of protein but only eat
this
food
are not good for individuals the reason behind it is that lots of
animals
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to
ful fill
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the demand of
food
and it is
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thing for humanity and another point is that by eating animal
food
people
also
face some health problems.
For example
, bird flu is
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common disease in the world and many
people
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throw it. To see these
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of incidents
people
change their eating habits and consume vegetables and fruits.
Furthermore
, humans
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also
make
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kind
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of things by the
use
animals
like clothes and medicines in the past. Due to the
the
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advancement the uses of
animals
is less as
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to past time. There are several ways to make clothes like chemical production of
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three
and convert into clothing material and
use
for sticking
also
rather than
use
leather for
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clothes.
In addition
, medical industries
also
use
natural products to make Madison's
such
as Aurevadic and allopathic are
also
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in hospitals. To capsule,
animals
have
also
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feeling
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as
human
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humans
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have. So
use
natural methods is beneficial for
people
as well as it
save
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the animal kingdom.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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