Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spend somewhere else. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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It is often argued that government should
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more money for different disciplines rather than
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.In my opinion , I completely disagree with
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view and thinking that
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presents multiple values to
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and one of the most important
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that we have to improve it.
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, artistic activities help people to entertain and have some positive energies .
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, after a long and
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day of work or study , individuals prefer to practice their
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hobbies or attend a pleasant event in order to relax , break from work and reduce
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of stress .
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, a lot of families find pleasure to watch movies at the cinema in holidays for the reason that can help them to have fun and be in good mood .
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,
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remains a fundamental element in
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human
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and we cannot ignore
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huge positive impact .
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, I strongly believe that artistic children become more successful in their
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. To put it simply , students who are
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interested
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art
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leisures , find themselves rapidly and improve their mental and physical health by introducing
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themselves
theirselves
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to novel ideas and skills and improving their imagination and
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creativity
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,they adopt various good habits and break harmful ones .
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, my cousin who was
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timid
and addicted to video games has fewer interests to study and no goals in future .
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, his
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was changed positively after the day
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painting in school , he
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passionated
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and really work hard to become a great painter .
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, he
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developed
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in
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.That's why
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can makes
a positive changes
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in children's
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. In conclusion , I take the view that the government should put more effort to improve
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's field because it presents
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impact
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the behaviour of humans and helps children to
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in their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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