Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spend somewhere else. To what extent do you agree with this view?
It is often argued that government should
provides
more money for different disciplines rather than Change the verb form
provide
art
.In my opinion , I completely disagree with this
view and thinking that art
presents multiple values to human
and one of the most important Fix the agreement mistake
humans
field
that we have to improve it.
Change to a plural noun
fields
Firstly
, artistic activities help people to entertain and have some positive energies .In other words
, after a long and tired
day of work or study , individuals prefer to practice their Replace the word
tiring
art
hobbies or attend a pleasant event in order to relax , break from work and reduce level
of stress . Correct pronoun usage
their level
For example
, a lot of families find pleasure to watch movies at the cinema in holidays for the reason that can help them to have fun and be in good mood . Thus
, art
remains a fundamental element in the
human Correct article usage
apply
life
and we cannot ignore his
huge positive impact .
Correct pronoun usage
its
Secondly
, I strongly believe that artistic children become more successful in their life
. To put it simply , students who are intersted
in one of Correct your spelling
interested
art
leisures , find themselves rapidly and improve their mental and physical health by introducing Add an article
the art
Correct your spelling
themselves
theirselves
to novel ideas and skills and improving their imagination and Correct your spelling
themselves
creativy
. Correct your spelling
creativity
creative
Moreover
,they adopt various good habits and break harmful ones . For instance
, my cousin who was timide
and addicted to video games has fewer interests to study and no goals in future . Correct your spelling
timid
However
, his life
was changed positively after the day who
Correct pronoun usage
he
tryed
painting in school , he Correct your spelling
tried
become
Change the verb form
becomes
passionated
and really work hard to become a great painter .Correct your spelling
passionate
In addition
, he developped
plenty Correct your spelling
developed
skills
in Change preposition
of skills
self confidence
.That's why Add a hyphen
self-confidence
art
can makes a positive changes
in children's Correct the article-noun agreement
a positive change
positive changes
life
.
In conclusion , I take the view that the government should put more effort to improve art
's field because it presents positive
impact Correct article usage
a positive
to
the behaviour of humans and helps children to Change preposition
on
success
in their Replace the word
succeed
life
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