It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The idea of being gifted has always been a serious topic for human beings. Some people claim if someone is considered successful in some fields
such
as sports or music, he or she was born with
such
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while others believe
although
it can be in their genes, it is not wholly about being born with it and being taught by some tutors can make a great
sports person
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or musician out of them. I personally agree with the
second
group
, and here in
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we are about to discuss these two views. To shed a light on the
first
group
's point of view, we can point out that
such
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might result from seeing some great musicians
such
as
Bethoven
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Beethoven
or
Mutzart
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Mozart
, who has not been trained but turned out to be awesome composers. Comparing these high-achieving artists or
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sports men
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to other famous
artirsts
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artists
who have trained all their lives, they might jump to
this
conclusion that
although
the not gifted ones tried so hard, they could not exceed the other
group
. They are either on the same level with them, or still need improvement to get where they crave to reach so badly.
On the other hand
, one would say it does not matter how talented somebody is, if the potential is not well-taken care of, it can lead to corruption.
This
group
might suggest
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lots of women writers who have had the potential, but just because of the situation not only were not they allowed to express
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, they
also
would have been punished if the others found out about them. While there were so many men who could have
this
priviledge
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privilege
of using all the facilities,
hence
they could work hard and succeed just because of the opportunity that has been given to them. To cut the words short, having special abilities in some fields does not
neccessarily
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necessarily
mean you do not have to be hard-working at all. If somebody is willing to do something, he or she should be
couragous
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courageous
and stick to what they want until they get it. No matter how difficult it would get or how
dissapointed
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disappointed
they might become sometimes. Talent is the motivation, but courage is the key
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success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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