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The overuse of natural resources cause an ultimate exhaust of them. People have been using them to be in swim of new styles such as making new furniture of recent design. This causes a huge harm to the environment. Therefore, the government should discourage people the overuse of this resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, people are excessively using raw materials from our
planet
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 to produce various items
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 as leather bags and fuel for heating services. All of these acts damage the natural resources of our
planet
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.
As a result
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, government authorities should warn and discourage people from using them. I fully agree with
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 statement, and in
this
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 essay, I will explain why. On the one hand, the earth's resources are being consumed by humans in numerous sectors of their lives. One major use is the use of fuels
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 as oil, gas and coal; all of these fuels are used in different services,
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, transportation, electricity and heating.
Secondly
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 is water. Water is crucial for living, agriculture, and manufacturing since it can help cool machines and process goods.
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, there is clothing. Almost all of the clothes around the world that are produced by fast fashion sites are made out of polyester, which is a material
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 plastic-based.
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, a wide range of animals are used to make bags and clothes,
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, leather, wool, fur and silk.
On the other hand
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, these sectors create a huge impact on our
planet
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 and its ecosystem; the
extract
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extraction
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 and
process
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processing
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 services require lots of energy, which creates gas emissions that can cause air pollution.
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 to that, intensive agriculture and deforestation can harm the soil, which reduces its quality and removes forests; all of
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 can disrupt the ecosystem of our
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To conclude
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,
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 consuming natural resources is important for our life and helps us enhance it, it can
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 destroy and impact the earth, which can cause health and global issues for our communities.

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task response
State your view in one line at the start and make a simple plan for the main points.
coherence
Each paragraph has a main idea. Keep one idea per paragraph and use clear link words.
cohesion
Use linking words to show order and cause. Use simple, common words.
content
Give more exact examples to back each point.
grammar
Check grammar: subject-verb, plural, and tense.
task response
The writer states a clear position.
structure
An opening and closing part are present.
content
Examples from daily life are used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources - things we use to live, such as water, wood, metal
  • environment - air, water, land that surround us
  • government - the group of people who lead a country
  • discourage - to make people less willing to do something
  • overuse - use too much
  • waste - use badly or too much, then throw away
  • design - plan how something will look and work
  • furniture - movable objects like chairs, tables for a home
  • harm - bad effect on something
  • policy - a plan or rule made by government
  • law - rule made by government
  • tax - money charged by government on goods or actions
  • ban - to stop something by law
  • recycle - to use again materials after use
  • reuse - use again
  • sustainable - able to keep going for long time without harm
  • pollution - dirty air, water, or land
  • climate - weather pattern over time
  • habitat - the place where animals live
  • industry - business in a field like wood, metal
  • economy - how a country makes and spends money
  • consumer - a person who buys goods
  • business - company that makes or sells goods
  • education - learning about a topic
  • awareness - knowledge about a topic
  • standard - a level that is set for quality
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