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LANGUAGE 1. Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays, there are some
languages
which
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 should be considered as disappearing.
This
 essay agrees with
such
 a viewpoint partially and
firstly
 it will
be discuss
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 the importance of
languanges
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languages
.
Secondly
, the fact that
extinction
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the extinction
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 of some
languages
 continues at
alarming
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an alarming
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 rate will be discussed. The vast majority of people are convinced that everyday communication will become easier than it is proposed now, but the
language
 is still important for
culture
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 development
the
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 countries.
The
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language
 has been considered as one of the most important
part
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parts
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 of
unique
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the unique
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 experience and identity of society.
For instance
, there are some local places around the world, where wildmen prefer not to attend to the modern world and use their own traditions and culture.
On the other hand
, it is believed that the little group of
languages
 is not necessary for the modern world due to their limitations. Mostly believed, that
a
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disappearance of
languages
 connected with western cultures, which induce society to use
an international
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an international language
international languages
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languages
such
 as English, German or French.
Besides
 that, the usage of several international
languages
 has made
the
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international interaction easier and successful. To conclude, I firmly believe that using
an international
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an international language
international languages
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languages
 would help
to
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the society cooperate
in
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insufficient
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sufficient
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a sufficient
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 way,
although
 it is essential to maintain the
language
 even if there are several people who speak
this
language
 because it is part of traditions.
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