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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and they should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree?

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In most
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 society has to pay
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 based on the amount of their income. Recently, some people argue that they should not pay
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 and should save all of their incomes by themselves. Personally, I disagree with
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 argument, and I believe that paying taxes plays a vital role in each country and provides the government to spends
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 money for provincial civilization and development at various places. The primary reason we have to take into consideration is that citizens by paying
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 will enable the government to spend money to improve the quality of their life. To be more precise,
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, every day many people use public transports to go to their university or work, so the state has
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 responsibility to renew the public transportation vehicles
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 as buses in each city. Another reason that worth point out is that taxi is an important source of income for each state.
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, there are a huge number of retired or disabled individuals who are not able to work and do not have any income at all.
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, the authority by giving taxes from workers will be able to help economically weaker persons. In fact, if we pay duty normally, we will help other people. In summary, I would like to conclude that paying
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 is not waste of money,
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, government save these and
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 spend them to develop the country at different levels, like improve transportation facilities, education facilities, roads development, as well as help individuals who need financial aid.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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