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Most of the museums have admission fee to entrance.

#museums #admission #fee #entrance
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Majority
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 of the
museums
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 have
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cost
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 for entry while others are
fees free
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fees-free
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.I personally believe, there are many advantages pricing people outweigh the disadvantages.
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 with, many
museums
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 have entry fees for individuals but some of them are
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cost free
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.
Museums
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 have multifarious benefits by charging money for
entrance
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, they collect enough money to maintain the buildings
such
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 as roof, doors,painting walls etc.
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, it attracts
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the
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apply
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visitors.
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, by costing management get more collection to extend the buildings of
museums
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.
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,
recent
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 study shows that visitors
fee
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fees
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 get more than half of the bills paid
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 as cleaning, electricity bills and
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employee
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employe
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employee
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 wages.
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,
entrance
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cost
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 is helpful to increase security arrangements as well as for some
museums
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 keep expenses and ancient arts or exhibitions.
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, some art
centre
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centres
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 are increasing
amount
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the amount
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 of
collection
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collections
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.
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, many privileged families can not afford
this
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entrance
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cost
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.
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, their children
also
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 do not get
chance
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a chance
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 to see beautiful arts and gain knowledge. To conclude, I would suggest that there should be
limited
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a limited
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 amount of charge for trippers and should be
free
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the free
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entrance
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 for children into the
museums
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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