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it is important to give children the opportunity to make decisions from an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that giving adolescents to make their own decisions is very essential from a young age. I completely disagree with
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 opportunity may lead to bad consequences in their life way and disrespectful relationships for their parents and elders.
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 with , decision-making from an early youth has several devastating effects which in turn leads to a horrible society.
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 , children's overall skills at the youth of 12-13 are still developing , and
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 they won't be able to make an effective decision which may lead to undesired outcomes. To show , the unfaulty decision may lead to a certain person being addicted to alcohol substances .
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 , at an early age child might be influenced by a filthy friend zone which can cause an impact in his future leading to bad habits.
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 , parental assistance should be provided to the children due to the lack of experience in the youngsters about the harsh outside world .
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 , an elder's assistance is required while choosing a career's option in the life of a specific individual . To illustrate , a teenager in 12 standard selecting his streams from science and commerce may not know the demerits of commerce stream which his elder' might know .
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 , parents can give a good illustration of the effects , benefits of each course. I completely disagree with the fact that he is given the opportunity to make a personal decision at a young age, as I mentioned, there can be a lot of problems with life paths, and he makes a lot of mistakes, and is stuck in a zone between bad friends, and they can influence him to commit a crime, break the law, even will be alcoholics and using the drug.
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 children should express their own opinion but final conclusion have to make parents.
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