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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs(for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many people think that unpaid community
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 should be a mandatory subject of a
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-grade program. I personally agree with
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 because of many reasons.
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 with, I personally believe that learning should not be in only the school, students should have to develop their life
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. Voluntary work can help for
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 point, It offers many
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 as teamwork, communication
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, problem-solving
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 and time management.
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, when the students have to go somewhere they have not been, they have to work with people that have not met before,
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, the communications
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 will be developed. For another example, there is an activity that to join as a team, the direction is they have finished up something in time, from
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 incident, teamwork
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 and time management
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 will be developed
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, the unpaid
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also
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 help the volunteers finding themselves and what they are good at, For example, they can teach younger children about football, the physical education teacher is suited for them,
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 if they are good at playing music for charity, Musician is appropriate to them.
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, voluntary
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 help the volunteer to be more confident. In conclusion. I strongly agree that voluntary
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 should be a compulsory part of high school because they offer many benefits to the participants and those
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 they will get from these activities will be useful for their future.
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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