As a result of deforestation and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

Please accept my sincere gratefulness. Currently, I have better fitness more than before, and I am able to come back to work
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usual. I am almost normal because of your aid. I owe you one.
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few weeks, I have to see the doctor again to check my health. I hope it will be
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. By the way, I would like to invite you and your family to my home
month. It is my birthday, so I will throw a little party with my friends. I hope you
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come together. You do not need the present. Just come and enjoy that will be a wonderful time for me. Looking forward to seeing you. Yours faithfully, Ramon
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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