some people say that spending time to develop a successful career is the most important thing. Others say that spending time with friends and family is important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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thing in any human
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. There are those who say that
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believe that
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important to spend
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both sides of the
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and provide my overall opinion to support my
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. Generally
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there are mainly two reasons why
people
believe that we should spend
time
to build my
career
. Perhaps the main reason why
people
are in favour of
this
idea
is
because
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develop a
successfull
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successful
career
is the
first
priority and all other relationships are
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secondary
.
That is
the reason we should spend
time
as much as possible to develop
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career
. If anyone can develop
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career
,
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of the
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people
will come in
life
without any effort. A
further
point in favour of
this
idea
is that
,
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without
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career
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people
have to be always dependent on others.
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, if any
people
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time
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relationships instated of build
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, they may have to
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on
this
. Despite, the
arguments
there is cause for the
idea
that spending
time
with spend and family is important. Perhaps the main reason why
people
think
that is
a good
idea
is
because
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,
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relationship with
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friends
and family is the main
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for mental peace. if any
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people
have
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career
but
not
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good relationship with friends and family, there is no value for their
life
. Bad relationships turn into
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problem
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such
as
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,
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alcoholism
and
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alignment
. in conclusion,
this
is a topic which is very relevant to modern
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society
.despite
arguments
to the contrary. I feel very strongly that, spending
time
for developing
the
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career
is important. if have only
good
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relationship
whithout
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without
career
,
life
will be always
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dependent
dependant
on others.
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