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Space exploration is a costly project. The money would be much better spent on reducing social problems. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Presently, many countries have become more attention to
space
 exploration than in the past.
However
, the cost of the project is expensive. Some
people
 believe that the government should spend the
money
 for solving social
problems
instead
 of
space
 exploration projects. Even though
,
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 I agree that
space
 investigation is necessary, it is my belief that the social
problems
 need to be
first
 considered.
This
 essay will outline the reasons for my opinion. There are various reasons to consider
space
 exploration. The
first
 and most significant is decreasing of natural resources in the world. The reason for
this
 is the increasing rapidly of population and modern technology, it can
therefore
 some
people
 think that finding extra resources on other planet is one of the solutions. Apart from
this
, another point is preparing for danger from outside the world. Some
people
 believe that there are creatures from
space
 that can harm our life.
Therefore
, investigating
space
 leads to extend our knowledge about
space
.
Although
 there are numerous reasons for exploring
space
, I consider that
money
 should be used for solving social
problems
. Nowadays, some governments believe that
space
 investigation and
space
 technology is the way to show off their power to other countries.
This
 leads to spending unnecessary enormous funds on
space
 invention. The majority of
people
 face many issues
such
 as crimes along with lack of food and education in daily life. The most essential of which is a crime.
This
 is mainly due to not have sufficient security
such
 as lights along the roads and safety guards, which leads to being easily got crimes.
Therefore
,
money
 should be spent on improving the quality of life and developing their society. In conclusion, while there are arguments both for and against investigating
space
, I believe that
money
 is much better spent on declining
problems
 in countries. Personally, it is my belief that it is essential for the governments should concern about certain
problems
 which
people
 face at
this
 time.
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