Write a letter in response to the parent. In your letter, you should: • discuss and evaluate the issues raised by the parent in the letter • give your own views about teaching life skills and whether you think these lessons should replace other subjects in the curriculum.
I would like to convey my gratitude and appreciation regarding your thoughtful input, concerning the preparedness of
students
to face the reality of life
beyond academic achievement. After conducting some meetings with the school
’s founders, I am able to give feedback regarding this
issue.
I notice that your children still cannot live independently and have failed to accomplish what we call basic life
skills
,which they should be able to execute when they have grown up. In this
case, I am aware of your daughter’s failure in certain aspects
. First,
I notice that your daughter has a lack of understanding in how to manage herself when doing certain chores as it seems that she has completely struggled due to
never having been trained for washing her clothes and ironing them. What is more, she has a tendency to spend a lot of money by not preparing home-cooked food or buying new clothes, causing her to waste money. Nevertheless
, I fully understand your worries about the practical life
skills
that students
might lack once they leave the house. Although
I see that school
has put too much attention on academics, I believe that educating children is not always dependent on school
, yet parents should cooperate, fulfil their role, and teach them those aspects
from a young age. What is more, with their attention more on academic aspects
, clearly school
has little time
to teach them certain skills
at school
. It has become another factor as they have little opportunity to master, such
things, which I believe can be done through parents’ guidance and discipline when they are still young. Other than that, studying in class has something that is
incomparable.
Furthermore
, I can see that your son has too much dependency on you, and it seems that you stand for him in any situation which he should be responsible for. For instance
, you visit him to help him clean up his room and provide him with a credit card, leading to his carelessness in managing time
and money. Our curriculum has already been focusing on teaching the students
about their academic knowledge, and we must carefully balance these academic requirements with the limited time
available. By this
, I mean that students
’ investment in spending their study time
learning more advanced skills
where the practical skills
should not be explicitly included in the school
curriculum as they might have technically been taught indirectly in other subjects is completely more valuable than giving them specific time
to only focus on practical skills
, such
as washing clothes and ironing.
Other than that, I would say that besides
teachers at school
, parents will have a far more crucial role. I believe that not interfering with your children’s responsibilities in certain aspects
and letting them master the practical skills
when something happens to them after leaving the house is far superior because they will learn step by step how to face the reality of life
when no one helps them doing small things like house chores or paying bills. Therefore
, this
situation will shift their childish thought into a more independent young generation through the opportunity to learn new practical things when necessary to increase their awareness of becoming more responsible individuals.
Despite all your concerns, we definitely review your suggestions and consider how we might improve our students
with the skills
they need from school
. Thank you for your valuable input regarding this
issue. Your continuous support for enhancing the quality of this
school
is greatly appreciated.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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task achievement
Your letter addresses the concerns raised by the parent and offers thoughtful feedback. However, more specific examples and direct responses to each issue raised in the parent's letter would strengthen the response further.
coherence and cohesion
While your letter is generally well-organized, there are some long and complex sentences that could be broken down for better clarity. Ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea to improve readability.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate and respectful, which is highly suitable for this type of correspondence.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are both well-crafted, showing professionalism and appreciation.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.