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Some people believe that one-on-one lessons are better for learning while others think that group lessons are superior. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #lessons #group
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In the present age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether private
classes
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 are more beneficial for the
students
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 or
group
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classes
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. Some people argue that personal
lessons
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 have better outcomes, while others agree with the opposing view. From my perspective, studying in a
group
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 can increase the learning potential of
students
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.
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 with, many individuals assert that
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-on-
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classes
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 should be better for the
students
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 to learn their
lessons
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. They elaborate on
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 by saying that in the private
lessons
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 teacher has more time for each pupil and will be able to work with them very precisely.
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, during a
one
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 hour class, when the lecturer has only
one
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 student can teach more subjects and concentrates specifically on
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 person.
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, other people believe that there are more benefits in
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group
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classes
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. I firmly argue that children need to attend in teams to learn how to live in a society.
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, studying in a
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 can
teachs
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teach
teaches
 many things to the
students
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such
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 as cooperation and competition.
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,
classes
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 with more than
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 student create
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 opportunity for pupils to have a discussion together and share their
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 of
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.
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, when the teacher asks a question, each of the
students
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 can have different answers, as a
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 they will learn something new from each other. In summary, I would like to conclude that attending
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the
group
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lessons
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 has many merits and improves some features in
students
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 like
cooparating
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cooperating
 with their classmates. On top of that, it is right that personal
classes
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 provide more time for each
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students
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 but they are lacking
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many other essential factors.
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