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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

#areas #curfew
Imposing certain restrictions on
teenagers
 is being made an important aspect of
parental
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 routine. In few parts of
US
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, restricting youngsters from not going out after
certain
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a certain
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 time
in
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night
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the night
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 without being accompanied by an adult has been made effective which is being known as "
curfew
".
This
 essay will discuss
on
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how
this
 practice would be beneficial to
teenagers
 and how it could cause
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an issue
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issue
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issues
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 for certain youth. Recently survey conducted in
US
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 proves that 40% of crimes happen at
night
 and many children trafficking cases have been lodged at nighttime compared to morning time.
Also
, there are plenty
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 food
centers
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 across the cities, claiming to provide free food and drinks after 10 P.M
in
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night
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the night
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 and
this
 would definitely attract
lot
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 of youth who are trying to save some bugs. Implementing
curfew
 at
night
, which makes it mandatory to have an adult accompanied by
teenager
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a teenager
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 would help parents to protect their children and
also
 provide them guidance on what preventive measures are to be taken going out at
night
 even in future. On other hand, applying
curfew
 can
also
 be an issue for few
teenagers
 who do
night
 shift jobs.
Also
, the more you impose
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a restriction
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restriction
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restrictions
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, the more
teenagers
 would find ways to break them
such
 as sneaking out from home at
midnights
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midnight
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. Parents should start spending more time with children and find easy as well as effective
way
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ways
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 of restricting things around them. Implementing restrictions is good in most cases but
also
 has its own flaws.
This
 essay has discussed both
positive
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 and negative
side
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 of imposing
curfew
 at
night
 and in my opinion restriction on certain things should start from childhood in a family and should not
await
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 until rules are imposed by
government
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the government
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.
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