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The majority of
people
 believe that social networking sites are creating a huge negative impact on individuals and society.
This
 essay would discuss
on
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the issues being caused while using social
media
 and how it can be utilized for the betterment of society.
Firstly
, every individual has easily found a way to access the internet, eventually making their way to social networking sites. The social
media
 platforms
such
 as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram have very innovative ways of attracting
people
 and not imposing any sort of age restriction to use the platform. The recent survey conducted in Washington, DC declares that 40 % of overall population use social
media
 almost every day on an average of 3 to 4 hours and
this
 indeed is causing health-related issues
such
 as
people
 started getting depressed comparing their life with others on social
media
 seeing their vacation pictures and achievement posts.
Also
 using social
media
 at night in darkness is heavily causing sleep disorders. In
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society,
people
 started considering themselves worthful only if they have more friend requests on Facebook than in real life. Considering all
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 points social
media
 is likely causing a negative impact on most of our lives.
Secondly
, social
media
 websites can
also
 be beneficial if they are used in an appropriate way for good causes
such
 as during COVID time many celebrities have come forward through live streams to share awareness and explain the precautions to be taken.
Hence
 if used appropriately social
media
 can be made a platform for sharing more meaningful information for mankind.
This
 essay has discussed on both positive and negative impacts, and I would say definitely social
media
 is causing negative impact but we as an individual should know the risks and take precaution to prevent these platforms from affecting our lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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