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The given diagram explains the stages involved in processing the
milk
. Overall, it can be depicted that there is a total of seven steps involved before the distribution of
milk
. As can be seen in the diagram,
first
 of all,
milk
 is bought at the plant by a tanker. Later three processes are involved before the clarification of the
milk
, they are grading, weighing, and sampling. Once the sampling process is completed,
milk
 is clarified in the
next
 process and
then
 it passes through the method of homogenisation.
On the other hand
, the
last
 two steps involved before the distribution of
milk
 are pasteurisation and cooling in the former stage various packages of
milk
 bottles are packed and sealed and in the later ,stage these packages are kept for cooling. In the end, a distributor collects and stores these packages of bottles in his van and distributes them in the market or to the retail shops whichever is
next
 in the chain of the distribution process.
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