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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. What do you think is the case? Is this good or a bad thing?

#people #clothes #case
The trend of dressing up has existed for a long time, not just at the present time. I believe that wearing beautiful
clothes
 has more benefits than drawbacks. There are two significant reasons why wearing stylish
clothes
 is a good thing: boosting
confident
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 and making an impressive impression. One of the obvious reasons is that arraying
encourage
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people
feel
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 confident with themselves both physically and mentally. Many
people
 do not have a positive thought
with
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about
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 their body, so some
clothes
has
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 a certain shape which can create an illusion of the public's ideal body type.
As a result
,
people
 feel beautiful wearing garments that can conceal their flaws.
This
 effect of clothing
also
 leads to solving mental health issues because wearing trendy garments makes
people
 who feel bad about themselves love themselves more. Clothing affects a person's temperament and characteristics. It
influence
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 how
people
perceives
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oneself
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, especially the
first
 impression.
For instance
, when doing
the
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 job interview, a person should dress formal. It is not appropriate to wear sandals or shorts to the interview since it may appear unprofessional. Another example is when hanging out with friends; if a person
wear
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 suits to hang around with their friend, the
clothes
 may be looked out of place.
Therefore
, dressing
with
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in
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sylish
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stylish
 cloth attracts
people
 and makes them have
good
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 impression on
oneself
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themselves
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. In conclusion, in my point of view, there is only
benefit
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 in putting on beautiful
clothes
 according to the reasons aforementioned.
Lastly
, I recommend
people
 buy outfits that they like and do not feel obscure by other
people
's opinions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • express individuality
  • boost confidence
  • self-esteem
  • social status
  • designer labels
  • cultural icons
  • art and creativity
  • financial strain
  • overspend
  • fast fashion
  • culture of waste
  • economic growth
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