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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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These days, because of the increase in population,
people
 are adapting to live in gated communities, apartments and advanced colonies where there is a chance of seeing a greater number of
neighbours
. yet, we cannot find neighbourhood sharing great bond because of many reasons like personal
issues
, differences in culture and professional hierarchies.
Firstly
, personal
issues
 are the most common problem among
neighbours
 that can be seen in every neighbourhood.
People
 have a lot of complaints about parking slots, volume on televisions and visitors. These
issues
 are very frequent and silly
however
,
people
 cannot ignore them. One can always overcome these
issues
 by maintaining a positive attitude and approach, maximizing communication with the dearest ones.
Secondly
, culture plays a prominent role in sharing good relationships among
neighbours
, because cultures and traditions have a huge impact on society. Families from different cultures cannot accept their nearest very easy.
For example
, Asian families may not accept Australian families living
next
 door because of their food habits, language hindrances, way of living etc. All the cultural differences can be tolerated by exchanging respect. Societies should welcome more cultures and start exploring them to understand
people
 more efficiently.
Finally
, Professional hierarchies among
neighbours
 arise because of ego, pride and self-admirations.
For example
, doctors, lawyers, accountants have a greater status to maintain in the society and feel uncomfortable while sharing the neighbourhood with daily labour. Open mind, developing friendly nature and social practice are the possible ways for the solution. In conclusion, good bonding, a relation among
neighbours
 drives
people
 in achieving peace and prosperity in the community and the larger/ of these communities makes a better nation altogether.
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