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Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

Many people believe those
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 which are tough for
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such
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 as
mathematics
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 and
philosophy
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, should be independent
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 for them. It is apparent that these
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 are quite difficult for some youngsters and they are not appropriate for student’s aptitude. I personally agree with
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 to
mathematics
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 but I disagree with
philosophy
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 because it is important to children’s future.
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 with, it is undeniable that
mathematics
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 is a very complicated
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. If learners pay attention to it and try to understand it clearly, it will be an easy
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.
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, many
students
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 are confused and do not understand it right away.
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 might be a case because perhaps it is not their aptitudes. The government should not effort
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 to learn what they do not prefer, it may increase the stress of many
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 and as the result, perhaps they will not graduate smoothly. They should be free to choose their education to follow what they are good at, to support their dreams to work in the way they like.
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,
philosophy
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 seems to be
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 of the useful
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 which are teaching the learner about a fact of life, fundamental questions, reason and mind. Those things are needed in human’s life because life is not always beautiful and full of happiness, there will be many problems that will happen to our lives, which means we have to get practical solutions to fix them right away.
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, when a person participates with many people in the same work, it will be seen that there will be several conflicts that need to be carefully solved.
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, if they do not know how to tackle the problem, it will
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 lead to severance in the end. To conclude,
mathematics
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 is
one
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 of the most difficult
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 which affects student scores and lead to earning a low grade.
This
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subject
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 should not be a compulsory
subject
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 for
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. Meanwhile,
philosophy
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 is a necessary
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 which will teach
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 several profits,
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subject
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 ought to be
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 of the main
subjects
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 in the list.

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