Some people think that criminal behavior can have genetic reasons, while others believe that only circumstances can lead some people to crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are some arguments about what may cause the criminal
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in a person: nature or nurture. It seems to me,
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can explain the reasons
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criminal actions. According to the view which depicts the genes are more important for criminal
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, some offenders are those that were nuts when they are
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and were teasing their classmates or other children, so, they were complained by other people most of the time. These vicious criminals have a nervous heritability which caused them
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anti-social
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.
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, these individuals often come from
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violent
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with the same-acting members. These people start the criminal activities via
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petty
crime
and develop their anti-social outcome to savage ones.
On the other hand
, advocates of the view which shows environment can push some people towards the
crime
, believe that these individuals were not born with a silver spoon in their mouth, so they need to provide their desires by themselves. Once they cannot reach
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their requirements even the primary ones, they encourage
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criminal performance.
Also
, some of them are forced to do an offensive or illegal treatment by their parents or family.
This
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them to horrible crimes. From my point of view,
both
genetic inheritance and environmental status could have
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on
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rate. Some kinds of experiments on siblings show that
gene
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can be a factor for penal accomplishments. In
this
case, the siblings have an insane manner and harm others.
Furthermore
, the conditions where children are reared in is significant.
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population
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mostly, experience domestic
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not sufficient facilities to grow up healthy
both
mentally and physically.
Therefore
, either genes or the bad situation can make offenders. In conclusion,
both
views about criminal
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would be correct. Nature and nurture are engaged in
crime
generation. The family and society status can make
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or destroyer nation as much as heritability.
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