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The age of information and technology has taken a lot of people by surprise while it has become a way of life , others know very little about it and may be unlikely to learn .eventually we will have a polarized society and this will lead to serious social problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is irrefutable that nowadays,
technology
 has taken over our lives.
People
 are divided on the issue that it becomes a part of life while others think they
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do not
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 not keen to learn .
Therefore
, it divides society on basis of digital aspects. I do believe that it would
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 in some dangerous social problems but I
also
 have some reservations which would be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, in today's era of
technology
 and globalization, all spheres of life are changing drastically.
Similarly
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use of information
technology
 is not an exception. There are ample
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reasons to justify that society would be polarized in upcoming years.
Firstly
, some portion of today's population is still unaware of ways to use
internet
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the internet
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 and it would make their survival difficult in
this
 globalization era.
For instance
, they
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do not
don't
 know how to use
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 to pay bills, search locations and for other uses in
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daily life.
Therefore
, they still prefer to be in lines which takes a lot of
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time and energy.
Secondly
 , it would
also
 put a huge impact on the business as they are not aware of different advertisement methods which are
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 on social media platforms.
Therefore
, they
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would not
wouldn't
 be able to promote their products to other parts of the country.
Hence
, it would ultimately affect their income. To illustrate it, a survey was conducted in 2018, which stated that 7 out of 10
people
 prefer to shop online It is rightly said that every coin has a flip side.
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number of alternatives aren't
also
 present to overcome
this
 problem. Organizations and Governments keep it in mind and make special arrangements for them
also
.
For example
, during
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 Government had made some booths for offline registrations for
people
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who aren't unable to book online for vaccination. In a nutshell,
although
 organizations
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 done a lot for
people
 those
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do not
don't
 know how to utilize the
technology
 but
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 of other population taking advantage of it really well. So, it would not be wrong to say that it is
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 as well as
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 for
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society.
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