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In today's world, the pressure of modern life negatively impacting family life. Do you agree or disagree?

In today's era, innovation and
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 play a very important role in maintaining status in
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. In the conventional world, maintaining class and status in society has created adverse effects on family
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. I completely agree with the notion that the strain of maintaining a modern lifestyle has a detrimental influence on one's family. There are many reasons why I believe that family
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 is being adversely affected because of cut-throat competition at
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 and in social lives. The raging competition in the labour market has made individuals
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 miserable by excessive workload demanded by the office and tight deadlines which compels individuals to put an extra effort at the workplace.
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, an individual gets less
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 to spend with the family.
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, rising inflation and financial requirements of the family
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 a working man to go the extra mile to satisfy his family needs which leave him with no
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 to spend with families. To illustrate, a recent research study released by Texas University has shown that more than 65% of people in America
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 double shifts to meet their monetary needs. Another reason is societal pressure. Society measures an individual achievement by his materialistic possessions
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 as a big house, a luxury vehicle, a high level of education, etc.
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, to achieve a modest lifestyle according to society, both the parents have to
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 harder and
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 for longer hours.
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, especially children do not get the required attention and are more likely to be emotionally turmoiled,as parents do not get sufficient
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 to spend with them. In conclusion, I completely agree that the rapid pace and stressful lifestyle in the conventional era are having negative consequences on family
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. Seeing the situation, family members should be more supportive of
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each other
, and parents should give ample
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 to their infants.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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