The children have unsupervised access to Internet and socialize with others that can lead to dangerous consequences

The
parents
are being criticized for giving
children
unsupervised access
of
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Internet
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the Internet
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to interact with others, surf bad websites, use social media and
to
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play games. In
this
essay, I will shed the light on disadvantages of the unsupervised access
of
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Internet
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and how we can tackle
this
issue.
Firstly
, without the supervision of
parents
Internet
access can lead to dangerous consequences
of
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children
due to the fact they can socialize with hackers and kidnappers that put them at risk personally and financially.
Secondly
,
children
visit paragraph Websites secretly as
result
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of it they become addicted to browse these sites and put
bad
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affect
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on their body and brain.
Thirdly
, they love to play games but some
game
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can be threatening.
For instance
, fire fairy and blue whale took
life
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the life
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of two
children
in Lahore and was reported in
media
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. Fourthly,
children
may try adventurous sports and risky experiments which are viral on social media
such
as jumping into rivers has taken
life
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of many. We can do few things to solve
this
phenomenon
such
as
Internet
service providers give
parents
control options
which
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can be used and there are many
softwares
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software
software's
are available that block and restrict unwanted materials.
Moreover
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parents
should indulge with
children
online activities, in
this
way they can keep eye on them. The
parents
can ensure they use inter for knowledge and entertainments purposes. In
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nutshell
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Internet
is
unsecured
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the unsecured
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place for kids where they encounter plenty of threatening situations.
Parents
should set
time
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limit
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of
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their use and keep eye on their
children
.
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