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Some companies sponsor sport and sports stars as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's world, advertisement has become a way to play with people's minds. There are concerned individuals who feel that, in order to sell their
products
, companies should use announcements. Others,
however
, believe that we should not support actors or sports stars for endorsing brands. I completely agree with the latter statement and in
this
 essay, I will support my view with examples. Publication holds a vital role in encouraging a common man to buy a particular
brand
.
Moreover
, nowadays, we can see many known personalities are becoming part of
such
 advertisements. For an exam, If a famous cricketer does an endorsement for any random energy drink,
then
 that
brand
 becomes a trend among the youngsters.
Similarly
, when a middle-class person watches any herbal
brand
, he will definitely feel attracted towards that
brand
, as it has been put on to his mind that if he purchases that product
then
 he can get all the benefits showed on TV.
On the other hand
, the major disadvantage about
such
products
 is that we never know if, whatever they are claiming is actually achieved by that product or not. We simply trust the
brand
 because we think that the actor or the athletic will never promote any wrong
products
. But in the reality, these celebrities are getting paid in huge amounts and without even using these
products
 they prefer to promote them. One
such
 example is soft drinks. We can notice that many famous personalities promote certain brands and in reality, they are harmful to our health. In conclusion, giving any notice is not wrong but we should make sure that these
products
 are safe and secure to use.
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