Many countries consider eighteen-year-olds to be adults, while other countries don’t. What do you think about it? Give your opinion and some relevant examples based on your own experience.

In most countries ,
eighteen-years-old
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is the age for a person to be considered
adult
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an adult
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.
This
is a
stage
where most teenagers who
are now became
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now become
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adults
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adult
are conscious enough
for
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their actions and know the difference between good and bad . A person who
turn
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eighteen
have
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spend
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fourteen years in school where he or she is thought about
the
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society , how to live in a community, and how to make decisions according to oneself opinion.
For example
, in high school , teachers prepare us to face university by asking us about our future career and
also
giving us knowledge about different the world .
This
is where most teenagers
are now call
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students and are free to make
there
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their
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own choices .
This
makes them responsible and
self conscious
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of their actions .
Moreover
, according to biology, at the age of 18, male and female have
reach
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their
full body
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development, which
make
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their body systems reaching the level of maturity. At
this
stage
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a
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teenagers are now considered
as
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an adult
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adult
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adults
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because their reproductive system is matured enough to start
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adulthood which is getting married and having children. To conclude, being an
adult
demand a mental
stage
of decision making and being responsible.
This
does not exclude the fact that our body appearance
also
show
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our new
stage
of adulthood.
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