Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued by some that creating an international holiday to incentive the no-use of cars would reduce greenhouse gas emissions. Others claim there are other ways to mitigate
this
problem. The paragraphs below will outline both
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and expose why I think that creating a car-free day would not diminish air pollution. There are two main reasons why part of society believe that do not
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cars for a day would help to reduce pollutants. One of which is that fuel used in their motors, whether is alcohol fuel or gasoline, after combustion produces harmful volatile carbon gases which are released
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the atmosphere. Another reason is that since
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revolution and car invention, air pollution has risen,
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, it is reasonable to believe that stopping its usage would decrease carbon derivatives production and,
consequently
, reduce purify the
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environment
. In stark contrast, there are others attitudes that could be
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that would undoubtedly be more effective in controlling
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pollution.
First
of all, boycotting animal meat enterprises due to the fact that cattle, swine and even fish breeding farms are responsible for the majority of methane
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annually
produced globally.
Secondly
, using clothes which brands work with sustainability seal.
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is because
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industry
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known to be the
second
most polluting market in the world,
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, encouraging green brands is more effective to diminish
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damage, including the air. To conclude, in my opinion, investing in an international day to not use auto-vehicles is, indeed, a positive action.
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, it is necessary an aggressive change in people's
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and attitudes to effectively improve the gas emission
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the atmosphere.
Therefore
, a car-free holiday, despite being creative and inspiring, is not as beneficial as stop eating animal flesh and using
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environmentally
friendly clothes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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