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Some students take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has been found that usually, a
gap
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year
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 is taken by some
students
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 after finishing their secondary education so they can
work
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 or
travel
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. The
students
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 who take the
gap
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 to
work
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 would be able to choose the right course comfortably and confidently for
further
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study
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, whereas those who choose to
travel
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 may discontinue their education. I believe that all
students
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 should have a chance to do whatever they want even though some of them would decide not to
study
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 more later.
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, those
students
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 who want to take a
year
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 off to do
work
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 of their choice will be self-confident while selecting the program to
study
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further
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, because when
students
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 focus on something they want to, for the period of one
year
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, they will eventually get to know the right field of their preference.
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, I have never used the computer till my high school was over, even though I always wanted to. So I took a
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 off to
work
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 on computers.
Consequently
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, I got interested in computer programming, which
subsequently
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 led me to choose an IT course in the university without any doubt.
On the other hand
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,
students
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 who take a
gap
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year
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 to
travel
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 may lose interest in the
study
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. As a consequence, they might choose to end their
study
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. To illustrate, I had a friend who took the
gap
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 and started
traveling
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travelling
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. He continued his journey even after the one-
year
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gap
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 was over.
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, he started working with his father. To conclude, in modern times many
students
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 take the
gap
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year
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 to
work
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 or
travel
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. The
gap
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 can be beneficial for
students
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 who choose to
work
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 as well as it may become the reason for other
students
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 to leave the
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study
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. Still, I think that
students
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 must have an opportunity to explore the field of their choice even if some
students
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 would want not to start
study
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 again.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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