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Today food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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It is true that customers are able to buy
food
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 produced far away from their home country. There are several reasons why imported
food
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 has become increasingly accessible.
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, the essential reason is globalization, resulting in
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 open trade environment, so that a variety of
food
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 are permitted to enter the foreign market.
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, aiming at broadening
customer
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 base,
food
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 producers are willing to sell their products abroad.
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, owing to the advancement of
transportation
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the transportation
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 industry,
such
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 as air transport,
food
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 can be delivered in an efficient way, preventing fresh
food
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 from being spoiled even though transported to places thousands of
kilometers
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 away. The trend of importing foreign
food
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 has both benefits and shortcomings. On one hand,
this
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 trend has
positive
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a positive
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 effect on enriching people’s diet. Consumers have access to different kinds of non-local
food
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, especially those unable to grow domestically. Cultivated in
certain
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 region where has most suitable climate and soil, some imported
food
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 contains the highest value of nutrition, contributing to
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet.
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, some negative impacts on local farmers result from numerous imported
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. Customers tend to purchase foreign
food
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 because they regard that some non-local
farm
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farms
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 can produce
food
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 of higher quality.
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, local farmers, who produce the same goods, lose a certain number of customers. Some of them are forced to compete with foreign producers by reducing
price
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prices
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, leading to
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 decrease in profit. To sum up, it is common that
food
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 can travel and be sold abroad. Generally,
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this
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 phenomenon has positive and negative effects, the merits of it outweigh the disadvantages,
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, consumers have
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choice
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 in
food
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • import/export
  • agricultural technology
  • logistics systems
  • consumer preferences
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