Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do agree or disagree ?

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of people thinks that
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more impact
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teachers
rather than their
parents
after they join the
school
. I fully agree with the above utterance as
infant
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spend more
time
in
school
. To commence with the view of disagreement that
parents
have influent their
children
more and they become their role model.
In other words
,
parent
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are the
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who
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their child from the beginning of
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life and they have
impacted
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on
child
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the child
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. So
parents
also
influence their
children
a lot in life. Shifting towards
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of
agreement
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,
children
spend their quality of
time
in
school
and classes
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throughout
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through out
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the day with their
teachers
. To elaborate it, in
school
child
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spend around six hours per day and they try to share their problem with the
teachers
.
For example
,
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survey was conducted by
Central
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the Central
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Education department in India, which results
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around 80% of
children
spend long hours in
school
rather than
home
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at home
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.
As a result
, by spending more
time
in
school
student
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students
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get
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affected
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effected
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affected
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by
teachers
.
Further
strengthening view as
teachers
are the
one
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who can judge the ability of the
student
and try to shape their career in the proper direction. To explain it,
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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can know the talent of
student
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students
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and they will teach them
accordingly
and give proper guidance in building
better
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future.
For instance
,
a
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Jim Barney the person who was
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architect.
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interested
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in architect was seen by their teacher during their secondary
school
and due to the proper guidance of their
school
teachers
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his
parent
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he became
successful
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architect.
Thus
,
teachers
have
impact
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an impact
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on
student
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students
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. In conclusion,
although
parents
are the
first
teachers
of their
children
even though
children
spend more
time
in
school
. So,
teachers
also
equally influenced the
student
.
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