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Some people believe that governments should invest more in protecting minority languages, while others think that this would be a waste of valuable resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Thousand of
languages
 exist in the world. It is considered by many that for safeguarding them that
are
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 spoken by a minority, the
government
 should allocate more
money
, others think that
this
 would be a misuse of sources. I think that whichever
languages
 are spoken, it should be preserved by the
government
 except for it spoken by a few
people
. On the one hand, the minority’s
languages
 are parallel to those’ cultures, and it includes their memories related to their ancestors.
Therefore
, preserving it used by minorities facilitates protecting their cultures, resulting in it contributing to cultural diversity in the countries and
thus
 build in peace of society.
For instance
, Indian
people
 whose
language
 is about extinction have improved and maintain it with the support of the U.S
government
 and either their existence is accepted or U.S society reach peace.
On the other hand
, trying to maintain the
language
 that has a number of spoken
people
 below a certain value
such
 as a hundred is not useful.
Hence
, rather than wasting
money
 for that reason,
government
 spend
money
 for improving their society’ wealth. Since these
languages
 have not been used in any literature or among large tribes.
For example
, Black Sea Armenian is only used by four
people
 so the
government
 attempting to develop
that is
 a waste of
money
. In my opinion, governments haven’t a lot of budget for spending any trivial subject. Like being the evolution in nature, the extinction of some minority
languages
 is inevitable.
Thus
, it is not needed that every
language
 must be supported, and
government
 should choose which
languages
 are protected. In conclusion,
although
 almost every
language
 must be saved by the
government
, some
languages
 do not need that protection because of their low number of spoken
people
.
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