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Using a computer everyday can have a negative influence on young children. Give some reasons to support this view.

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Nowadays, the more society develops, the more
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technology develops,
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 the necessity of
computers
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 for human life.
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, some people think that using a computer has a negative influence on young
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. In my view, it is evident that using it has not only disadvantages
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 but
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 advantages On the one hand, I side with good conditions created by
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 for learning and relaxing. To illustrate,
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 provide youth with diversified methods for studying. Many websites are created to search
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 information.
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, if the
children
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 have a problem with their project,
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 are tools to help them.
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, after a hard-working day, they can listen to music, play
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, watch films,
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 Almost all websites and applications for these entertainments are free.
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, using a computer can cause a few disadvantages for young adolescents.
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, using it every day may bring diseases of vision. The blue light from the screen of
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 reduces vision and the sleep hormone.
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, if the
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 sit in front of the laptop for 2-3 hours, their eyes will be hurt and it is difficult to sleep at night.
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, the
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 on
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 distract the study. Teenagers like playing
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 to the point they neglect their studies.
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, they forget to have regular meals or eat fast food without nutrition.
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, young
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’s mentality can be influenced by violent
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 or films. It is not easy to tell the difference between the real or virtual world. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
computers
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 are helpful for learning. But using a laptop excessively may create negative influences on youngsters. So,
children
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 should use laptops three to four times a week.

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