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Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society

#people #children #thirties #trend #benefit #society
There are many concerned individuals who feel that getting married in your
thirties
 is not an ideal situation. While others feel that it is perfectly fine to be married after thirty. I completely agree with the latter statement, and in
this
 essay, I will explain both sides of the topic.
Firstly
, When we get older, we not only just get older by
age
 but we gain more experience and knowledge about our personal and professional lives.
for example
, During our teenage, we tend to trust people more easily, even though we have been taught not to believe strangers and as a consequence, we often get hurt by these situations and in the end, we learn a valuable lesson. There is a famous quote that when we go through major challenges in our
life
 we grow through them and in reality, they actually teach us to see
life
 from a different perspective.
Secondly
, being a married man, it becomes difficult to manage your responsibilities and maintain the balance required to have a peaceful
life
.
Furthermore
, In my view, When we concentrate on our future at an early
age
,
then
this
 will assist us to plan our after the
thirties
 or even our married
life
 in a much better and efficient way as it aids us to become more financially secured and safe.
On the other hand
, If we get married before the
thirties
then
 it might become difficult to take good care of our family.
Also
, your
age
 can help you to make a better decision based on your old incidence.
For instance
, If you are married at the
age
 of 25 and you are not stable in your
life
then
 it becomes hard to concentrate on both the important aspects of your
life
. In recent studies, it has been proven that more than 60% of people prefer to get married after their
thirties
. To conclude, despite there are several reasons why an individual should get married before his
thirties
, I'm inclined to consider the pros of after thirty marriage outnumber the cons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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