Some say that the standard of behavior among children has worsened and that this is their parents fault others says that schools are to be blamed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the current times, we have seen that young kids are at the worst of their behaviour. While a few people are of the opinion that the mother and father are the root cause for
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, while some others feel that it is the
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institutions that are really at fault. In
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essay, we shall look into the role of both the
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and the
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. On one
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we have the
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, who are falling behind in disciplining their
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children
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is quite evident when they try to satisfy every wish and
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of their
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, they
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do not impose strict punishment when
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ward steps out of line.
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, in a recent visit to the mall, we saw a
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that was throwing a huge tantrum so that his mom would buy him another toy. The parent failed to bring her son under control and make him realize that he already had a brand new toy.
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the end, it was the parent that purchased the additional toy. From
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it is quite evident that
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that fail to imbue discipline raise kids with bad behaviour.
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we have our
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institutions that are showing some serious lack of interest in the upbringing of the
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, teachers nowadays, are of the opinion that their only role is to impart education or knowledge to the
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learning in their class.
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, they tend to forget that the
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is the
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home for a kid and they fail to ensure that
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develop a good character along with a good education. To conclude, we can see that
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and
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teachers share some part in the misbehaviour of
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. It is my
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opinion
that, though teachers play a large role in
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a
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's character, it is the
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parents
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prime duty to correct the bad behaviour of
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and failing to do would make the
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the root cause for a
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's misbehaviour.
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