Some say that the standard of behavior among children has worsened and that this is their parents fault others says that schools are to be blamed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the current times, we have seen that young kids are at the worst of their behaviour. While a few people are of the opinion that the mother and father are the root cause for
this
, while some others feel that it is the
school
institutions that are really at fault. In
this
essay, we shall look into the role of both the
parents
and the
school
. On one
hand
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we have the
parents
, who are falling behind in disciplining their
child
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children
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.
This
is quite evident when they try to satisfy every wish and
desires
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of their
children
.
Further
, they
also
do not impose strict punishment when
thier
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their
ward steps out of line.
For instance
, in a recent visit to the mall, we saw a
child
that was throwing a huge tantrum so that his mom would buy him another toy. The parent failed to bring her son under control and make him realize that he already had a brand new toy.
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the end, it was the parent that purchased the additional toy. From
this
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it is quite evident that
parents
that fail to imbue discipline raise kids with bad behaviour.
On the other
hand
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we have our
school
institutions that are showing some serious lack of interest in the upbringing of the
child
.
For example
, teachers nowadays, are of the opinion that their only role is to impart education or knowledge to the
children
learning in their class.
As a result
, they tend to forget that the
school
is the
second
home for a kid and they fail to ensure that
children
develop a good character along with a good education. To conclude, we can see that
parents
and
school
teachers share some part in the misbehaviour of
children
. It is my
opnion
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opinion
that, though teachers play a large role in
molding
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a
child
's character, it is the
parents
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prime duty to correct the bad behaviour of
children
and failing to do would make the
parents
the root cause for a
child
's misbehaviour.
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