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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that scholl is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Discipline and punctuality are two qualities that every human being should have. Many think that it is the job of
parents
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 to teach
children
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 how to be good citizens of
society
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, whereas other think that they should learn it from school. I agree with the
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 thought and in
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 I will present my arguments and provide my opinion.
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,
children
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 spend the majority of their
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 at home with their
parents
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. So the influence of
parents
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 will be much more on them. So it is the job of guardians to teach them and make them aware with a concept of respect, to every fellow citizen in the
society
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.
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, they should provide a
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 model in their
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 or they can become a
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 model for them and provide them with a comfortable environment to learn, to respect each other.
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,
parents
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 should
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 teach their
children
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 about their duties towards
society
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, it helps them to build a character.
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,
parents
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 should encourage kids to participate voluntarily in social work and community services.
Last
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 but not least, money management is
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 a quality which should be taught them by their guardian as it helps them in there in the budget in future.
On the other hand
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,
teachers
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also
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 play an important
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 in every student's
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. It is impossible for kids to learn each and every aspect of
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 from their folks, in
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 cases
teachers
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 should come and play their
role
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.
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, school is the best place to teach the value of discipline as it is a hard quality for
parents
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 to teach their kids. Discipline not only helps each individual but in, general it helps to develop a better nation as each citizen are aware of their duty and
role
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 in the
society
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.
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, punctuality and
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 management are two important aspects of
life
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. These two virtues should be taught to students by their
teachers
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. In
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 case,
teachers
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 should give them some task to complete within a limited
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 and who gets succeded in completing them within a
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 limit, they should be rewarded and make them a
role
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 model for others. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that it is a job of
parents
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 to teach
children
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 how to be good members of
society
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, but it is
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 important that in some aspects
teachers
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 and the school
also
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 play their
role
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 in
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 process and make each child good citizens.
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