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Countries should spend money on railways rather than roads. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#countries #money #railways #roads
Technological advancement has improved transport networks and communication systems to a great extent. Innovation of railways and roadways are
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this
 contemporary era.
However
, one school of thought deem that
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 amount of capital should be invested by nations to construct rails and spend less on streets.
This
 notion has flaws, which I strongly believe. All the modes of transport and communication
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 a crucial role
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 the survival of mankind. To commence with,
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 of pathways is cheaper than establishing railway junctions. Even from the economical viewpoint streets assist to carry goods and passengers within a very short period of time over a great distance.
Moreover
, more revenue can be generated if suitable pathways are in existence, which trains will not be able to produce. To illustrate, 11 lakh crore cash amount has been invested by the Indian government to build new paths in West Bengal, setting a 2025 deadline.
Furthermore
, 90
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 of essential commodities are being transported through roadways in India.
Consequently
, developing and underdeveloped provinces may look forward to
this
 alternative and inexpensive rapid medium of transportation.
In
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this
 perspective is that roads can pass through comparatively more dissected and undulating topography. Whereas, train-lines are susceptible to zigzag terrain and weather change. Not only
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 require frequent maintenance but
also
 monitoring regularly is needed, which is extremely expensive as well as
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 job to perform. Paths are more convenient to people
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 because door-to-door services are offered, which
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cost
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 effective.
Furthermore
, these improve overall connectivity within a region considerably and put in
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relationship
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 with neighbouring countries. Asian highway has been tooled by SAARC to develop international communication via land-routers,
for instance
. Routes are used as feeder to other ways of transport, seaports or rail-stations or airports, one needs to travel with help of them. To recapitulate, nations are advised to tool the most advantageous, compatible and efficient transit mode, which is land-way in my opinion. Because future success is directly proportional to the improvement of
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 realm and integrating
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 perspective into work by engaging
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 pursuits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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