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People nowadays are not fit and active than the people from the olden days. Discuss the causes for this situation and suggest some possible solutions

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Health problems are a serious complication these days .
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 , there are innumerable causes pertaining to it and if it all some stringent plans are not formulated and implemented
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 the problem can even deteriorate and it can tell upon there are many reasons and suggestions of
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 problems and I hereby give the following arguments to support myself . One of the major acting forces behind is that
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, Nowadays
People
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 are busy own their work and they can not go walk and after they are facing a lot of problems .
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 as fat increase , infection , blood circle and so on .
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 to
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 , they are playing more indoor games than, outdoors
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,
this
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 type of reason
people
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 is not fit and active . Apart from
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 , In the present time , most
people
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 are depending on new technology and they can not work hard .
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 , In the past time ,
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 are worked on their own and they did not depend on others and
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 they were eating traditional
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 and they were living inactive
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 ,
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 are eating fast
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 , young
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 and so on .
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 ,
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 type of impact
people
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 is suffering health dresses .
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, as every lock has a key so ,
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 problem can be stemmed out
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 , individuals should make the timetable for daily routine and they should avoid western
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 . After
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 , they should play outdoors games and
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 they should depend on their own . So , they can live in a happy mood as well as they can not face any healthy dresses and they can fit and be active in their life . After analyzing the matter , it can not be denied that
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 problem can be very well and effectively handled with the joint and collaborative efforts of the Governments and society on the whole .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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