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We have two documents, the
first
is a bar chart which represents the main reasons for working from
home
, for
men
and
women
. The
second
is a table which depicts the male's and female's percentage working at different hours per week from
home
. The bar chart outlines that the main
reasons
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reason
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for working from
home
is
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to save money for both
men
and
women
( respectively for 45% and 42% ),
then
24% of
men
think they are more productive, whereas only 11% of
women
have the same opinion.
However
, there is a gap from 22% between
men
and
women
who stay
home
for childcare : 26% of
women
against 4% of
men
.
On the other hand
, we can notice that
men
spend largely more time working from
home
than
women
. Indeed 81% of
men
work over 30 hours per week ( from
home
) whereas there is only 6% of
women
. As shown in the table, 74% of females work at
home
under
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ten hours per week. We can conclude that
women
are less working from
home
than
men
and it's more to save money and to take care of children while
,
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apply
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men
are in the most part working from
home
to save money and be more productive.
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