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Social media badly impact our relationships. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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 is a bar chart which represents the main reasons for working from
home
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, for
men
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 and
women
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. The
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 is a table which depicts the male's and female's percentage working at different hours per week from
home
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. The bar chart outlines that the main
reasons
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 for working from
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is
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 to save money for both
men
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 and
women
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 ( respectively for 45% and 42% ),
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 24% of
men
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 think they are more productive, whereas only 11% of
women
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 have the same opinion.
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, there is a gap from 22% between
men
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 and
women
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 who stay
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 for childcare : 26% of
women
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 against 4% of
men
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.
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, we can notice that
men
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 spend largely more time working from
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 than
women
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. Indeed 81% of
men
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 work over 30 hours per week ( from
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) whereas there is only 6% of
women
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. As shown in the table, 74% of females work at
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under
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 ten hours per week. We can conclude that
women
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 are less working from
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 than
men
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 and it's more to save money and to take care of children while
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men
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 are in the most part working from
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 to save money and be more productive.

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