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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, It is argued that
meat
 o fish could be dangerous for the health and they have
also
 an adverse impact on the World, for these reasons some
people
 decided to eat not these kinds of
food
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons and
next
, I will give my opinion about the statement.
Firstly
 I think that it is important to have a balanced diet, including any type of
food
,
therefore
 I eat everything in regular quantity and in my opinion
this
 will be the best solution for a healthy lifestyle.
In addition
, I believe that all the
people
 must include in their meal an amount of protein that we can find in
meat
 or fish but there are
also
 some alternative foods which have protein like beans or
others vegetable
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 and for
this
 ,reason
people
 can stay healthy with other options.
Although
 I believe that eating
meat
 or fish is important, I think that it can lead to environmental problems.
This
 fact is provided by the large amount of pollution produced in fishing
,
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 because several companies experiment the intensive fishing which leads to an increasing in sea pollution.
Moreover
, the
meat
 needs a lot of water to be ready due to the fact that the animals are fed with vegetable which is irrigated with water and the cycle continue until our meal. In conclusion, many
people
 think that eating animal’s
food
 can be dangerous for the planet and
this
 fact is provided by the research about
food
 companies but I think that it is
also
 essential to have a balanced diet, including any kind of
food
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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