You are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you are going to do work experience. In your letter • thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience • explain what you hope to learn from the work experience • ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

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Dear Sir or Madam,

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is John Western, and I am a new staff who will take three months off to do

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experience

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in your organization next month. I am writing to ask about some of my

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experience

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and

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information about my

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Firstly

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, thank you for having me to

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organization. I greatly appreciate your acceptance and willingness.

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, could you please provide me with more information about the

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experience

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? As I am an expert in the administrative field, I hope I can gain practical

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specifically to display my ability in

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field. If so, I would greatly appreciate your understanding and assistance in considering

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request.

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, should I bring my relative certificates and other documents with me on the first day? Is there a dress code regulation I should be aware of? These questions can help me to be well-prepared so that I will quickly fit into my job. Once again, thank you for giving me

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opportunity. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely, John Western

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task achievement

You asked relevant questions and expressed your gratitude well. However, there is some repetition in expressing your gratitude which can be streamlined for brevity.

coherence cohesion

Ensure your paragraphs each focus on a single idea; you combined asking for information and expressing thanks in one paragraph. Separating these would help readability.

task achievement

Your writing tone is polite and professional, suitable for a letter to a manager.

coherence cohesion

The letter is logically structured with a clear opening, body, and closing.

coherence cohesion

You maintain good coherence and flow throughout the letter.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

179 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

appreciative
hands-on experience
skill enhancement
networking opportunities
mentorship
organisational structure
company ethos
onboarding process
professional development
collaborative environment
shadowing
logistics
corporate attire
reporting hierarchy
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