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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, some
people
 want to have a stable
job
 and dislike to change their way of making money for living, while other
people
 are welcoming to have
experience
 about new things.
this
 essay will examine both sides and my
experience
. At
first
,
people
 who want to have a stable
life
 that doesn'
t
 want to have to change their
job
 since they have got a
job
 very early age even if they hate and feel bored with their
job
.
For example
,
people
 when they turn to 20s
that is
 the time to get a
job
 and don'
t
 have enough time to make money and have a family before getting old in many countries. That's why some youth they only think to become official servant which is never fired.
However
, other
people
 would like to have a variety of experiences and don'
t
 care about how old they are. Because a lot of
experience
 gives happiness and a sense of fulfilment in
life
.
For instance
, one Korean actor quit his previous
job
 since he wasn'
t
 happy
although
 he had earned a high salary before he became a movie star.
Also
, he mentioned that he is very happy even though he doesn'
t
 have enough money, but he is doing what he wants.
Thus
, having an
experience
 that
people
 have never done is quite necessary. To conclude, I think that
life
 is very long and don'
t
 have to choose their
life
job
 when they just turn to 20s.
Moreover
, there are numerous things to do in the world. I am sure
people
 can find out what they have been through and want all humans can be happy.
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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
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