Even though doctors advise old people to get more exercise, many old people do not get enough. What are the reasons for this? What are some possible solutions for this?

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary
sedentary lifestyle
motivation
physical limitations
lack of time
fear of injury
exercise facilities
misunderstanding
benefits of exercise
social support
poor health conditions
awareness
appropriate exercises
guidance
financial constraints

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Some school are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, While other schools have a very relaxed dress code. (What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?)