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Some of today’s schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. 🔸Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students’ education or would it be an unnecessary complication?

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It often argues that
parents
 should provide laptops to their children rather than depend on the
school
 facilities and others are against
to provide
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 the personal
laptop
. Let's discuss both
point
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 of
views
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view
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Firstly
, Modren schools are
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 on
the
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smart
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education
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eduction
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education
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. Study on the screen is more
convient
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than
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that
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 the books.
Hence
, from
school's
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point
 of view that it is
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quite
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quit
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quite
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 difficult to arrange
the
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 computer for every
students
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student
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. Major reasons are that the
finacial
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financial
 cost to buy the computers for every student and
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installation
installtion
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 cost to
upgarde
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upgrade
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classrooms
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class rooms
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classrooms
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.
Further
, maintenance of
these equipment
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 and recruitment of skilled staff would be another overhead.
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school
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point
 of view,
this
 is a valid
point
 and to
be consider
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.
Secondly
,
Laptop
 is
expensive
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 gadget for
the
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middle class
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parents
 and some can not afford
even
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 they
hadly
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hardly
had
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education
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eduction
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education
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.
Arrangemnt
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 of personal
laptop
 for
study
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 is
also
 costly affair for many
parents
.
Parents
 think that their expense would be raised to maintain the computers and provide internet services. Some are fearing that personal
laptop
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laptops
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 can be misused by children by viewing
wrong
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the wrong
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 websites. In the conclusion, I understand that cheaper
laptop
 to be introduced which can be used only for
school
 students.
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Government
Goverment
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 should provide free laptops for economical
bakward
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backwards
parents
. Other social welfare organizations should come forward to
assit
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assist
 to draft the policies The software used in the laptops should
be access
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 only for approved or valid websites.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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