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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is considered that aggravated issues may arise from dwelling in a
foreign speaking
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 nation. I strongly agree with
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 consideration and
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 essay will discuss some of the reasons.
Firstly
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, I think a strange
language
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 in a new environment will make
people
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 draw into their shells and not outgoing.
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, when
people
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 are unable to communicate in the native
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, they tend not to talk to
people
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 too often which results
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 a communication breach.
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, children or students who can not express themselves in a spoken dialect in foreign schools tend not to mix up with classmates and
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 not ask questions in class because they are unable to use the right words.
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 of
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, children stay reserved in public.
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, giving orders in another tongue can be detrimental professionally
is
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 not properly used. What I mean is that
,
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 having
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to
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carry out a task using a not-familiar
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 can result
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 a mix of words and cause serious complications
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 the long run.
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,
a doctors
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doctors
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 migrated from an English speaking country to a French one and while still a novice at using French, he mistakenly ordered a patient to take a medicine three times a day
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 of once a day and the person ended up dying of drug overdose.
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 is why dwelling in a place of
strange
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 tongue can be detrimental due to communication barriers. In conclusion, living in a country where a new
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 is spoken can result in social withdrawal and professional errors,
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,
people
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 should
first
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 take extensive
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 courses at arrivals of these countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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