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Some countries, more and more people becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
At
this
 moment,
people
 can access the
information
 easily. Some residence around the globe
keen
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 to researching the
history
 of their living place.
This
 essay address why
people
 would like to
finding
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find
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 the
history
 of their habitat and how they get the
information
 of their goal before the conclusion is reached. At the present time, the residence would like to know what was happening in the past and
is
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if
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 it affect
to
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the present time. As an example, the historical documentary depicts on the television
about
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Bangkok in 1915 which is the empowered nobleman’s palace at that moment. Surprisingly, โt is the
house
 of
Dr.
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Gak who is
the
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 famous tutor in Thailand, it
make
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 him amazed and he
post
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 the story of his
house
 on
the
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social networks.
Consequently
, it attracts
dweller
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dwellers
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 researching
about
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the
history
 of their
house
.
Moreover
, some
believe
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 in
the
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paranormal phenomena, which makes them
to
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ask the ex-owner
that is
 it have abnormal activity in
this
house
such
 as, the windows are automatically open, the books drop from the bookshelves by
itself
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.
In addition
,
people
 an ace as the
information
 more convince than the prat. They can research the historical
information
 from
internet
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an internet
the internet
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 search
engine
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engines
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 that
have
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 a wide range of sources for the
information
 including, government, historical organization, a blog for
history
 ,etc.
However
, if they can not connect to the internet they can research from
local
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a local
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 museum or local library, staff of
this
 place is the local residents that they profusion of their city. In conclusion,
people
 are enthusiastic about researching the
history
 of their habit,
additionally
, they convenient to achieve their goal. Everywhere have its
history
,
history
 teach for
treat
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a treat
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 the problem that happening in the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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