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For centuries, important part of education has been maths,writing and reading

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Introduction
Since ancient times, attention has been given
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developing and enhancing math writing and reading
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. With the advancement in ,technology the
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 has become an indispensable part of our lives. Some people think that
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 literacy should be added to other
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 set. I
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 advocate
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 idea.
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, where
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skills
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 were included in the syllabus,
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students
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 performed well.
Students
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 start coming to school regularly and become more attentive. They get good grades on exams. They become more focused on their education and do their projects collaboratively.
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,
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 had to go to the library thumbing through the history books and encyclopaedias to do research. Now all these books are available on
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 in digital form.
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, they can search any topic within seconds.
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, in modern
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 have taken over every field of life. ,Now all multinational companies and businesses totally depend on
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 because they have set up their business in different parts of the world and can manage through
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 as communicate through emails and organise their meetings on zoom.
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,
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 literacy should be added to other
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 set because of the prospective job.
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, every company demands the least
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 for any role.
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, adults face adversities in getting a good job.
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, in the survey of the leading jobs portal 95,% of companies seek
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skills
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 in resumes of the candidates .
Conclusion
In the conclusion,
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skills
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 are important because they can not only make
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 life easy but
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 for their future. With the support of ,
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 they can perform good and get a good job in multinational companies.

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