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There are some people believe that the internet connects people, while others think this isolates people. Discuss both view and your opinion.

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In the present age, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether the
internet
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 has positive or negative effects on human life. Some people argue that the
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 the bonds between individuals. While
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 many others believe that it prevents people to have more
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 in person. Personally, I am in favour of the primary view. On the one hand, some individuals assert that the
internet
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 increases connections among the population. It could be said that it provides a way to communicate with others wherever you are.
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new year eve while there are living in a different place.
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, the
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 makes it easy to keep in touch with our beloved persons all the time. 
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, many people think that, nowadays, most
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individuals especially youngsters prefer to use mobile phones and surfing the web
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 a meeting with their friends and have some funny hours.
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teenagers
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 have an Instagram account with a huge number of followers but in real
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 they have only one or two close
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 how to make new strong friendships and
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 in their difficult days. To sum up, I would conclude that the
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 is beneficial
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 different levels
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, there are some drawbacks as well. On top of that, it could be said that like other trends it needs to be controlled and be used in
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positive ways. Clearly, it makes our life more convenient and we are able to communicate with family and friends via emails, video calls, and etc.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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