Discipling a child is the responsibility either father or teachers.Do you agree or disagree?
It has been argued about who thak the prsiposibility to
discipline
the kids, the parents
or teachers
? However
, some people say that they both should take the duty to discipline
the children
. This
essay is totally
Change the verb form
has totally agreed
agreed
Add the preposition
onagreed
toagreed
withagreed
this
statement and discuss the support points.
There are several reasons that support my point of view. Firstly
, father and mother are children
's first
teacher
between the Zoe to three years old Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
stage
, they learn words, behaviour, time maintains from parents
. For example
, some parents
did not discipline
their kid
well in the early Fix the agreement mistake
kids
stage
, thus
lead the children
had
bad behaviour when they are in school. Change the verb form
to have
Is
caused some difficulties for the Correct your spelling
It
teacher
who teaches the kids. Therefore
, parents
should take the serious responsibility to educate and have to be a good influencer for the baby because they learn and copy what parents
do.
Secondly
, teachers
and parents
should cooperate to discipline
the children
during the school stage
, such
as time management, avoid peer's bad behaviour influence, because those things are significantly affected children
's future. According to recent research point out that, many students are lack of self management
and influenced by another schoolmate, Add a hyphen
self-management
therefore
, parents
and teachers
should guide the youngth
in a healthy way. And Replace the word
young
also
it shows that children
who monitor well by their parents
and teacher
will develop better abilities than others.
To sum up, parents
are children
's first
teacher
which can shape their teacher
in the early stage
and teachers
is the second
developer for them to gain the knowledge for their future. So I believe both parents
and teachers
are important to give them the guides and take the responsibility.Submitted by fankie.cecil on
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