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Discipling a child is the responsibility either father or teachers.Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued about who thak the prsiposibility to
discipline
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 the kids, the
parents
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 or
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?
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, some people say that they both should take the duty to
discipline
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 the
children
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.
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is totally
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agreed
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this
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 statement and discuss the support points. There are several reasons that support my point of view.
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, father and mother are
children
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first
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teacher
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 between the Zoe to three years old
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, they learn words, behaviour, time maintains from
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.
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, some
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 did not
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 their
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 well in the early
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 lead the
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 bad behaviour when they are in school.
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 caused some difficulties for the
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 who teaches the kids.
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,
parents
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 should take the serious responsibility to educate and have to be a good influencer for the baby because they learn and copy what
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 do.
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,
teachers
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 and
parents
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 should cooperate to
discipline
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 the
children
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 during the school
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,
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 as time management, avoid peer's bad behaviour influence, because those things are significantly affected
children
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's future. According to recent research point out that, many students are lack of
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 and influenced by another schoolmate,
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,
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 and
teachers
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 should guide the
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 in a healthy way. And
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 it shows that
children
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 who monitor well by their
parents
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 and
teacher
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 will develop better abilities than others. To sum up,
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 are
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 which can shape their
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 in the early
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 and
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 is the
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 developer for them to gain the knowledge for their future. So I believe both
parents
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 and
teachers
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 are important to give them the guides and take the responsibility.
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