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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Nowadays, thanks to the rapid development of the world wide web. It can not be denied that the
Internet
 plays an essential characteristic partially agree with
this
 viewpoint because of its potential dangers. In the positive aspects, the
Internet
 significantly improve
communication
 between people compare to the past. To be more precise, people in the past used to write
letters
 and wait for replies for a very long span of time.
In addition
 to
this
, there
also
 have some missing
letters
 or wrong address
letters
, which made sending
letters
 become an unsecured means of
communication
. Thanks to emails and several other online messaging systems,
communication
 between different hemispheres have become more accessible than ever.
As a result
, the
Internet
also
 gives a feeling of closeness which means no person is far now, with a click on the mouse or some simple manipulation of fingers, and we can do a video chat with somebody that far thousand of kilometres away from us. On the different hand, online
communication
 has led to various social issues for the users. Some people, especially adolescents, are addicted to chatting on social networking websites
such
 as Facebook, turning them anti-social. They prefer interacting with unknown strangers over the
Internet
 rather than with their loved ones around them. In conclusion,
although
 the
Internet
 has made it possible to gather everyone together, it
also
 gives rise to various issues which can have an extreme impact on a person life.
Therefore
, we should use the
Internet
 widely and balance between using time on the
Internet
 and family.
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